DreamFighter
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Post by DreamFighter on Jul 26, 2010 21:20:49 GMT -8
Title:A Simple Love Poem Backround: I was reading a lovey-dovey tihng, and it inspired this. Work: A Simple Love Poem
Spinning we go,
Around in this darkness,
It surrounds us tightly.
In our circle,
We watch the stars,
Waiting for the sun to rise.
In the fields,
Of golden grass swaying,
Where our songs are being sung.
Heart stunned,
Mind lost,
In this puddle here.
It has a name,
Below the surface there,
I call it love.
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Post by Colour on Jul 27, 2010 12:22:31 GMT -8
Pretty. I'd say a 9.
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Post by Sarah Baby! on Jul 29, 2010 11:37:54 GMT -8
9. It's hard to explain critiqing for poetry. It more of a poetic license thing.
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