[C+C] Let Me Go Forever

[DreamFighter]

Title: let me go forever
Background: eh, I was inadepressedmoodwhen I wrote this.
Work:

Let Me Go Forever

Scream my name,

Yell it out,

Show me you care,

As I lay here,

My spirit pouring out.

A tear slips from thine eye,

And a Revelation appears,

Your love,

It shows in tears.

So scream my name,

Show me your love,

Give my one lasting kiss,

And let go.

[Colour]

Very nice. At first I was looking a the tense you used, but then reread it. Nothing wrong with it that I can see. 10.

[DreamFighter]

Thank you, Colour. ^^ I appreciate teh Ratings.